Thursday, August 16, 2007

Castle

You're wandering around
An unlit hallway
No doors to let you out.

You think you're stuck,
That you ran out of luck.
But you found your way in.
You'll get back out, again.

Can't find a single soul
In this empty castle.
The way out, you don't know.

The torches are burned down
You found your way to the dungeon
Now you walk with a frown.

You think you're stuck,
That you ran out of luck.
But you found your way in.
You'll get back out, again.

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Not sure what I don't like about this, but something's missing. The rhythm seems a little off, and I'm not happy with the last line in the second to last stanza (Now you walk with a frown). I think I only put frown in there to make it rhyme. I also think it's a tad short, but that can't quite be helped.
Any ideas?

Tuesday, August 14, 2007

a whisper

it beats. you gasp.
a helpless girl, a kindred soul
somehow molded into one uniform being.
once broken, but now inexplicably whole.
that's their story, none truer, nor pure.
a whisper, a heartbeat
a hole where we should be
all contained within.
without
you

(note: you can't see the formatting on this, but it's in the shape of a heart. Looks kinda cool.)

Saturday, August 04, 2007

Writer's Block?

Turns out images are great spark-pieces. This past Wednesday, we had a pretty good writing activity. Jessica brought in a very .... interesting book to say the least. It's a collection of single pictures from picture books with captions, but no general story line. I managed to pull off over two pages before getting stuck/running out of time (we sort of tailored it so those two coincided), which is a lot for me :-). So anyway, if you're ever stuck for an idea, look up! Check out your wall-hangings or do a quick image search on Google.