tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-27301270.post115066653088927107..comments2008-11-19T19:24:32.435-05:00Comments on UM Writers' Community: Untitled PoemUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-27301270.post-1151254113422278752006-06-25T12:48:00.000-04:002006-06-25T12:48:00.000-04:00i like it better now. it flows better.i like it better now. it flows better.Ankithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11046782740721830353noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-27301270.post-1150770184994215222006-06-19T22:23:00.000-04:002006-06-19T22:23:00.000-04:00i meant more the form was kind of random. the even...i meant more the form was kind of random. the events in the poem aren't that random. it kind of reminds me of your sunflower poem. it's kind of like, well i guess i just don't catch much of an actual form. i do think rigidity is a word btw.Ankithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11046782740721830353noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-27301270.post-1150769450412679592006-06-19T22:10:00.000-04:002006-06-19T22:10:00.000-04:00I wasn't going for random necessarily, more of an ...I wasn't going for random necessarily, more of an observance of a particular event that struck me. This didn't literally happen, it's just how I felt at the time. The rigidity (if that's a word) of the poem is supposed to evoke or represent a certain mood.<BR/><BR/>I'd like to hear what more people have to say about it before I comment further.Joshhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02384490189526740490noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-27301270.post-1150766132586843902006-06-19T21:15:00.000-04:002006-06-19T21:15:00.000-04:00Hm. A little odd. Don't know if I like it, but tha...Hm. A little odd. Don't know if I like it, but that's not to say it's poorly written. I think it's interesting and kind of random. I like the ending.Ankithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11046782740721830353noreply@blogger.com