tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-27301270.post1462598577706906454..comments2008-11-19T19:24:32.435-05:00Comments on UM Writers' Community: InterstellarUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-27301270.post-57830030529788709512007-10-06T16:39:00.000-04:002007-10-06T16:39:00.000-04:00I love this poem!! i think the transitions are wor...I love this poem!! <BR/><BR/>i think the transitions are working well especially between the sections III and IV. the fact that you stopped at the line " i dropped that class" and then continued with "You're fading! You're fading!" is great. there is that pause before panic kinda thing.<BR/><BR/>overall i really like this poem. isnt it great that we are all basically just stardusts?fizahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08720308756044468959noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-27301270.post-56541551718515827462007-10-05T15:11:00.000-04:002007-10-05T15:11:00.000-04:00I really like the first two sections. I think the...I really like the first two sections. I think they go together well, uniting the beach imagery with the space imagery. I also like the idea (and maybe I'm wrong) that you felt more connected with the stars because of anatomy than you did through astronomy. I think playing on this idea would create an interesting dynamic in the poem.AlexBhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03380183079791507268noreply@blogger.com