Another I just found in my random writings folder- I don't remember writing some of this... hope I didn't steal it from someone. Here it is:
You’ll find me at the edge of time
The end of all things
The beginning of what’s to come
You’ll find me enduring the fiercest storm
Wind lashing my face
Rain flooding my bones and drowning my soul
You’ll find me kneeling before nothing
Penance paid to virtue
Soon I’ll find my destiny among those who’ve gone before
You’ll find me again, after all of this is through
I’ll laugh and smile to the breaking point
Someday I will have my time
2 comments:
Oh man. Great poem, but I really don't like the last line. It makes it seem so 12-year-old-emo for some reason. It just feels like a weak ending to a powerful poem. Maybe I'm just weird, though. Maybe switch the last two?
I took away the last line- after I read it again, (I didn't read it or do anything to it since I wrote it more than a year ago) I realized I didn't like it either. I hope this new finish is more crisp. (I also added a few words to what is now the second-to-last line).
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