Thursday, October 12, 2006

Untitled (as is the usual with my stuff)

sullen, stark and shabby,
he sits upon the stoop.

Slowly singing somber songs
Sipping on his soup.


Manisha said...

I said it out loud and it sounds really cool. You're very good with the rich minimalistic style.

Just a note though: I don't think of a "sullen" person as someone who would sing (even thought the songs are "somber"). I recommend reconsidering that word. Also, whichever word you use there, is there a reason it isn't capitalized?