Saturday, May 06, 2006

Any title suggestions?

You are my inspiration.
You are my reason
to keep living.
I need you in my life,
my love, my sweet.
Without you, I would be
only a man. But you
make me a person.
Thank you
for being all
I need and ever will.

Comparisons and comments please


Manisha said...

I like the distinction between "man" and "person" in this one. Yes, this is more free verse, and I actually think this form suits your love poetry best, even if the other one has more vivid imagery. Maybe you could try writing one with imagery in free verse?

Ankit said...

What's interesting is that the other one started out being free verse and when I was done with that, most of it had some sort of form, so I just carried it through. I only ended up editing like 2 lines.